X-MEN
-- "Longshot"
Outline dated 11/1/93
Page 4: It will not be acceptable for Mojo to call anyone "numb nuts."
Also, he should not pick Spiral up by the head.
Page 10: Either show that the hunters Rogue buries are robots, or do not
bury them past their necks.
Page 11: Please substitute for Longshot's two uses of the word "killed."
Something like "destroyed" or "take their lives" would
be acceptable.
X-MEN
-- "Longshot"
Script dated 11/18/93
Page 3: Please delete or substitute for Spiral calling Longshot "Lover,"
since we would not want to give their encounter sexual overtones.
Page 5: Caution on the appearance of the Warwolves after they hit the
truck. They may flatten in a "cartoony" way, but should not
look "mangled" or bloody.
Page 6: Longshot should not appear "wounded" or bloodied. Also,
what does "you sure you got guy" mean? It will not be acceptable
for a wolf to "slash" Wolverine in the back, nor for Wolverine's
claws to connect with any of the wolves.
Page 8: Please show Spiral transporting all of her "comrades,"
including the wolves, who should appear to be alive.
Page 12: Please delete or substitute for Wolverine's "we saved his
butt from some of Mojo's goons."
Page 22: Please delete or substitute for Mojo calling Longshot a "fallen
Messiah."
Page 23: It will not be acceptable for Jubilee to blast Jan in the face.
Please revise.
Page 24: Please either show a very tough creature going a very short distance
and landing safely, or use a coin for the toss.
Page 25: Please substitute for the boulder Rogue hurls at the two hunters,
since this would injure them severely. Please incapacitate them with something
less harmful.
Page 27: Please delete or substitute for Rogue's use of the term "scale
butt." something like "scale face" would be acceptable.
Page 29: Caution that Slagg not backhand Wolverine in the face.
Pages 31 and 35: Caution that no one is hurt by the raptors.
Page 32: Please show that the bounty hunters are alive after the facade
falls on them.
Page 36: Please keep the kiss between Longshot and Jubilee brief.
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